This is soooo silly of me. I know it is. :-) But, I need some of my writer friends to give me critiques/feedback on an ad I've placed for private musical lessons.
Here's how the ad looks:
Violin, Viola, or Piano Lessons
Willing to travel to your home if transportation is a problem. Family discounts available.
Orchestra director of largest elementary orchestra program in *nearby* School District.
10+ years experience teaching piano, violin, and viola to beginner-intermediate level students.
Have played viola and piano for 18 years.
Received high marks both regionally and state-wide for solos, quartets, and small ensemble pieces.
Suzuki trained, but will use any method that works for you or your child.
$15.00 – ½ hour lesson
$20.00 – 45 min lesson
$25.00 – hour lesson
(Add $5 to the above prices if I travel to you)
I look forward to helping you or your child explore the wonders of music! Call me if you have questions.
Now, here are my questions:
What is your first reaction?
Is there anything in it I should tweak? (Grammar, style, etc.)
Is there anything that is blatantly annoying?
What should I change that first sentence to say? I couldn't find anything that would get attention... So, any suggestions are appreciated. :-)
I'm given the opportunity to re-post the ad in 14 days and will change accordingly. :-)